by Christopher T. Hank Introduction
Today, the process of admissions for graduate programs is highly
competitive. In addition to the quantitative data (tests scores
and academic transcripts) and other materials that you will be asked
to submit to a school's admissions committee, a piece of writing
-- variously called a "personal statement", "statement
of purpose," "personal essay," or "statement
of background and goals" -- will probably be required as well.
The overall application package will represent who "you"
are to people whom you will most likely not know personally. The
written expression of your qualities as an applicant will often
be a very important way for committee members to get to know why
you are an acceptable candidate for their program. Thus, it is essential
to take great care in preparing the personal statement part of your
application. Because graduate schools make important selection decisions
that are partly based on what you say in this personal statement
essay, the writing of it can be an intimidating prospect.
This handout offers some points to consider as you undertake the writing of an application essay.
Start Early! Be Thorough!
If you have begun your application
process early, take the time to investigate thoroughly each institution to which you are applying.
- Go to the library and locate/browse-through/read texts or abstracts by the school's faculty members who work in your field or area of interest.
- Study and re-study the application materials sent to you very carefully; in particular, read through the school catalog and required course offerings.
- Find out if the school and program have web sites where you can learn more about them.
Taking these steps will familiarize you with the department, and
allow you to weigh its specific strengths and weaknesses in comparison
to those of other schools. While conducting your inquiry, take notes
so that you will have something to base your personal statement
essay on. Additionally, if you happen to know anyone -- a friend,
family member, colleague, or teacher -- who has graduated from a
school that you are considering, ask her or him for information
as well. Although such people may be very helpful, be careful not
to let their advice sway you too much, unless you are quite sure
that they are particularly familiar with the department in question,
and that their knowledge of it is up to date.
What to Include
The piece of writing that each school requests may be very different
from that of others; some programs may even ask for more than one
personal essay. Before you begin to write, study very carefully
the essay directions on the application materials sent to you by
the school and by the specific department to which you are applying.
While some programs leave the content of the personal statement
essay fairly "open," others may place explicit content
and length restrictions on it. Try to make sure that you have a
good idea of what you are being asked to write about.
Whatever the particular form of the essay asked of you, there are a number of basic areas committees are interested in. When evaluating your application, each reader will ultimately have this question in mind:
"Why should we let you into our school?" In order to answer this question, try to do the following:
- Clearly state your short and long term goals; tell how university "X" can help you meet them.
- Describe your areas of research and professional interest. You might indicate how your proposed studies are located within a broad field. For example, someone applying to a composition and rhetoric program might
say, "I hope to examine the relationship between rhetorical invention strategies and demonstrated ability to write for members of diverse discourse communities." Or, someone applying to an engineering
program might say, "My particular interests are in optical communications, networks, and signal processing. As an undergraduate research assistant, I studied the principles of wavelet transforms, one of the
most recent signal processing techniques, and I developed software models using Matlab to simulate the transform process. Currently I am investigating new applications of wavelet transforms. University X's
program in electrical engineering provides the direction and environment in which I can pursue my work in optimal communications networks and signal processing."
- Give specific reasons why you are interested in a particular field, as well as why you have chosen this particular school to apply to.
- Refer to past experiences, both academic and "real world," that are relevant to graduate study.
- Articulate what is particularly valuable about the perspective that you will bring to the prospective field of study and the specific department.
- Demonstrate your ability to think and express ideas clearly and effectively.
- Show motivation and capacity to succeed in graduate education.
- Write concisely and try to keep your readers interested. Remember that they are reading many application essays and therefore, you need to be considerate of their needs.
- Offer other information that demonstrates your need and desire to be accepted by the program.
Why this School?
Once you have developed a sense of the faculty's interests and the
department's special features, you can make it clear in your application
exactly why you want to attend that particular school. What
is it about the department's curriculum structure or general approach
to the field that makes you interested in being a student there?
Don't waste your valuable personal statement essay space, or your
reader's valuable time, telling the reader how wonderful or prestigious
their institution is; people on the admissions committee already
know this. They want to know about you.
Nonetheless, if there are special programs or institutes at the school that seem appealing to you, briefly
mention that you are interested in becoming part of them. For example, state that you "want to be a member of the XYZ Group for Blank and Blank Studies because . . .", but don't tell them how great, well respected, and world-renowned this part of the school is.
If, during your research on the department's faculty, a faculty
member strikes you as someone whom you might be interested in working
with, indicate this in your essay; be concise and specific about
why you want to work with this person in particular. A word
of caution here: Do not try to use this as a way to "butter
up" the admissions committee, because if there is any reason
to believe that you are not sincere, your application may be adversely
affected. Again, mention the person and how their work relates to
your interest, but don't load this personal statement with what
might be interpreted as false or superfluous praise.
Personal Information
Some applications may ask you to give a personal history, telling about experiences that you have undergone which have led you to decide to pursue graduate education in a certain field
of study. (If personal information of this sort is not required, then you are under no obligation to provide it.)
The information that could be included in a personal-type statement is limited only by your own
imagination and life history, but you should be highly selective about what you include. There are two things to watch out for: (1) saying too much and/or (2) not saying enough.
Some applicants may ramble on about
themselves in a manner that may appear self-indulgent and not very appealing to the committee. Remember, this is an application essay, not an autobiography. Conversely, some applicants tend to say too little, perhaps
hesitating to promote themselves too explicitly or not knowing what about about themselves would be interesting to people whom they don't know. In such cases, perhaps focusing more on what you want to do than on what
you have already done (let your record speak for itself), may help in getting beyond self-inhibition.
Generally, keep in mind that the points about your life that you highlight should be somehow relevant to both your
own interest in the field of study, as well as to the concerns of the admissions committee. In judging what information to include or exclude from your essay, try to balance academic, work-related, and personal
information in a manner appropriate to your situation, goals, and the application requirements.
Additional Considerations
If you have additional, relevant information about yourself that does not easily
fit into the essay, or into any other section of the university's application, you may want to include a condensed resume or curriculum vitae with your application package. This is especially applicable to those who
have worked professionally since having graduated from school. Relevant items here might include work experience, publications, and presentations, as well as language and computer skills.
Also, if you have
experienced times of great hardship or extenuating circumstances that have negatively affected your academic performance at any time, provide a short explanatory statement. This is another one of those places where
caution should be exercised: you want to explain the cause of your poor grades, etc. without alienating the reader by overdoing it. Once again, be specific and concise.
(Re)Writing
Although some people may
be able to write an essay from start to finish in one sitting, most would probably not be particularly satisfied with the results of such an effort. Outlines, including a list of possible components to include in the
essay, are often a good way to get started on your essay. Some writers prefer to start writing one paragraph at a time, re-arranging their ideas for orderly flow later on. Whatever method you use (only a few out of many
have been mentioned here), make sure to allow time for revision -- don't start your essay the night before you have to send it out!
Ask others to read your essay and give you honest feedback; tell
them that it is important to know what areas they find unclear or
unnecessary. Don't feel shy about asking for or receiving criticism;
remember, the effectiveness of your personal statement essay depends
on your being able to present yourself in a manner that is attractive
to admissions committees. Comments such as "it's good"
are not going to be very helpful to you because they will not help
you to improve your essay.
The Writing Center is
available to offer suggestions on beginning, revising and finishing your application essay, so make use of this valuable resource. Also for ideas on form and style selected application essays that students have written
in the past are on file for you to browse through at the Writing center.
After considering responses to your work, revise your essay until you are satisfied with it. (Remember to spell check the final draft). Also,
make sure that your name and possibly the essay title -- for example: "Personal Statement" -- is included in a header on the first page, and that your last name is on a header or footer for each additional,
numbered page (in case the first page gets misplaced).
Additional Resources
For more advice on how to approach application essay writing and
personal statements in particular, there are a number of extended
treatments of this subject, some of which may be available at your
library or graduate studies office. The graduate center at RPI has
at least two books, as well as shorter documents within graduate
school guides, that may provide you with a more comprehensive picture
of application procedures than could be articulated in this brief
handout.